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WOW! I love it!! basically all your mistakes were typos... wow. GO DRAGONS!! I sighed, and swung my head to the new visitor .Amber curls framed my tear-drop face and ...

ALO NEW PERSON! Dark (14), Elizabeth (15), Ivy (10), and Saxton (9) Dont put their names in brackets, it seems cold and emotionless. expecting to find out something less boring ...

Alo Roal, I haven't done this in ages, so I probably missed tons of things but oh well. Before I start, it sounds like a great story! I look forward ...

Well, on first impression the size is a lot better. Maybe a little shorter still. Her chest jerked forward as she coughed out an invisible hairball. If its invisible, how ...

WOW :smt119 I havn't read this yet, just saw the size. For more people to review it you should keep it shorter, the size of your last chaper is round ...

Elooo, been a while since I've been doing this, so have pity. :D place in the hopeless dungeons of the city’s orphanage Concise Oxford Dictionary - Dungeon = n . ...

Helooooooo...Heeelo... Living in Salem had been peaceful until the sranger had arrived. I think typo...Stranger The wind blew fiercely, his black coat billowed behind him. The stallion that he rode ...

Wow. And that's an under statement. Anyway, in addition to that it's perfect, everyone else - 21 people...I think that must end up in the Genus Book of World Records ...

Heloooo... ("nena" is Spanish, meaning 'little girl' or 'sweety') I would say you should put this in the Preface. my dress :smt017 People reading the story on paper wouldn't be ...

Ok, it's been a real long time sice I reviewed anything, so have pity on me here... we looked around. I felt sick at what i saw capitilize we and ...

Sorry if I don't find everything, but I'm not the alertest person at this stage. :smt015 I lked your story so far, and would like to see more!! And yes. ...

I kicked it to the side, away from Alex and scored with a banana kick. Sorry, but what's a banana kick? I launched myself into air and performed a bicycle ...

Ok.....Firstly, I couldn't find anything wrong with it...But I think that it was far too short, and I hope you're going to extend it..... But me like! :smt038

Heloo.....REWIEW here I come! Suspect running towards hells gates. Hell's said the loudspeaker, with one of those cant-wait-until-I-can-get-home-and-watch-TV voices :lol: You could have heard a pin dr

He slowly stood up and glanced over at his phone ringing. Ringing phone? You should leave out the ringing. The renowned billionaire is now a shadow of his former self ...